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So what we have is below ... the meter of the last line is a little "off" ... but the image is neat .. do you think the words "mist" and "lace" (lace and necklace) might be a little redundant? Doesn't really matter ... Anyway ... let's keep it going and see who this girls turns out to be and what she does ... ^-^

"Zeitgeisst"

The mountain mist beyond our reach with promises of rain

Swells like waves beyond the beach: The ebb begins again.

In pastel colors, rich in hue, the sky begins to swirl

And, in the clouds, I begin to see the image of a girl.

The clouds and mist become more gray, the girl is dressed in dark,

She wears a shawl of mist-made lace, her necklace..., a lightening spark.

Yes, ZendDog, that's mainly what I was trying to do, end on the words dark and spark. Didn't want it to sound like a wrap tune, but, thank you for mentioning that. LOL

Announcing; She's becoming! Clapping heels of thunderous weight

That damply–tamp & stamp the fertile ground; Her coming's fate

Thanks, Robert ... what a curious person is evolving here! I'll post our collective effort and see what additional responses we get ...

Here's where we are:

"Zeitgeisst"

The mountain mist beyond our reach with promises of rain

Swells like waves beyond the beach: The ebb begins again.

In pastel colors, rich in hue, the sky begins to swirl

And, in the clouds, I begin to see the image of a girl.

The clouds and mist become more gray, the girl is dressed in dark,

She wears a shawl of mist-made lace, her necklace..., a lightening spark.

Announcing; She's becoming! Clapping heels of thunderous weight

That damply–tamp & stamp the fertile ground; Her coming's fate