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this is so-o-o-o not about literature...

Posted: Oct 16, 07 3:34pm

all right, fellow scribblers. time for a break in the lit action. time to stop worrying about rejection notices, commas and semicolons, word limits, character development, plotlines and the rest.

we're going to write a little honkytonk ditty.

wait! come back here. it could be fun. if it's not i'll spring for a sixer of lonestar.

That Virtual Man Broke My Flesh and Blood Heart

... a honkytonk ditty by the TBD Writing Group

[... to the tune of "Your Cheatin' Heart," or Patsy's "I Fall to Pieces" or any other C&W-type tune that suits your fancy. Sorry fellas, but since I cut the ribbon the "protagonist" is a female.]

With a shotglass full of courage and 512 megs of ram

I went online shoppin'

For a brand new virtual man.

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Bmichael

Posted: Oct 16, 07 4:04pm

akabukowski wrote:

all right, fellow scribblers. time for a break in the lit action. time to stop worrying about rejection notices, comma...

Now you're talkin' there, sugar britches, I'm on it...

...be right back darlin'...

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LanSr

Posted: Oct 16, 07 4:22pm

akabukowski wrote:

all right, fellow scribblers. time for a break in the lit action. time to stop worrying about rejection notices, comma...

and 2.8 Giga hertz

to aid me in mah scan... (take it Bmichael or back to you Kat)

In her hurry to find VM, sugarbritches forgot more than her pickup...

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Bmichael

Posted: Oct 16, 07 4:53pm

akabukowski wrote:

all right, fellow scribblers. time for a break in the lit action. time to stop worrying about rejection notices, comma...

Well, I’ve had it up to here

With all the backwoods honky tonks

and the beer...

And all the hi flyin’ lies

and danglin’ string ties

and all those sweet nothins’

in my ear...

With a shot glass full of courage and 512 megs of ram

I’m gonna shop ‘til I drop for a brand new virtual man

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LanSr

Posted: Oct 16, 07 5:56pm

Bmichael wrote:

Well, I’ve had it up to here

With all the backwoods honky tonks

and the beer...

And all the hi flyin’ lies

and dan...

You're on the right track, cowboy,

but from my understanding, akabukowski started the opening lyrics, we are to add to them...

but I'll say this mi amigo, you've got one hell of a chorus here!

(Give me a riff on this one, k.d. or Wynona!)

Where's mah Blackberry? DANG, cain't write lyrics now...

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shiningpath

Posted: Oct 18, 07 11:46am

akabukowski wrote:

all right, fellow scribblers. time for a break in the lit action. time to stop worrying about rejection notices, comma...

Chorus:

Well I shuda supected somthin

when he said he'd no webcam

and the time it took to answer

each send from my IM

all the pics he sent were someone else

pulled from some modelin' site

Now I sit here cryin

all alone again tonight

** Yeah I know its another chorus, but maybe you can use it somewhere. The more I think about it, maybe it could be a verse, hmmm

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akabukowski

Posted: Oct 18, 07 12:21pm

shiningpath wrote:

Chorus:

Well I shuda supected somthin

when he said he'd no webcam

and the time it took to answer

each send from m...

hot damn! it's perfect. i thought this thread had broken...

let's see if anybody else chips in. once we've got enough lyrics to work with we can start to construct the song as a whole.

(does anyone out there think i need more to do? nevermind. don't answer that.)

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shiningpath

Posted: Oct 18, 07 1:36pm

akabukowski wrote:

all right, fellow scribblers. time for a break in the lit action. time to stop worrying about rejection notices, comma...

Well it started with a headless body

standing in front of a mirror

but I wasn't lookin that close

cuz I'd had a couple of beers

we started up a chattin

one thing led to the next

soon I was fallin in love

and forgot all about my ex

His profile just got better

new pictures every day

his story was breakin my heart

how could they treat him that way?

he was president of something

and director of something else

had more money than donald trump

but he lived on another coast

he promised to come see me

soon as he got the time

I sure never supected

he'd wanna do it on my dime

Ya see it's all invested

in bank thats overseas

all he needed was a little help

to turn it into CD's

he said just give your numbers

ssn and dob

I could keep a percentage

when he turned it all over to me

Now Im broke and the bank is callin

and some credit card company too

Howd I ever get into this mess?

What's a poor girl to do?

With a shotglass full of courage

and 512 megs of ram

Im going online a shoppin

for a brand new virtual man

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