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For Sharing: Poem, Untangling

Posted: Jun 10, 08 9:27pm

I am leaving

I am departing

I am pulling my roots

From yours.

Perhaps in their shock

They shall grasp

For yours in the dark,

Like our feet

Under the covers

Seeking the nearness

Of each other.

But I am leaving,

I am departing

Turning our us

Into a you

And I

Two paths

Two houses

Two lives.

My tears are falling…

For every ending

(even the needed ones)

Can be both sweet and sad.

For I am leaving,

I am departing

I am really, really, really, really leaving

And there is no right or wrong;

Only choices that we have to live with.

~Beth Sage-Weber

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MarkTrost

Posted: Jun 11, 08 7:06am

I tremendously enjoyed your poem. I like the analogy of the martial union as a tree. Not a forest - a union with limbs. I like how you carry it through ... I am leaving ... leaves. I love it. "My tears are falling" the imagery is so autumnal. So, end of the cycle.

I enjoy that you conjugate the verbs in the first person. It's defiant. It defines. The words are planted and firm. And unyielding. Your entire poem speaks of death. Of an end. Until the end. And then it's a beginning - "Choices that we have to live with." Live. Living. Hope. Better.

Thanks for sharing.

Congratulations on the courage to compose.

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EarthyPoetGrrl

Posted: Jun 11, 08 4:40pm

And thank you for your warm words of encouragement! Courage to compose? Ha! I believe poets exorcise their own demons;)

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